Thursday, January 6, 2011

Really Long Rant Poem Thing That I Just Had to Get off my Chest

I fell asleep to flowered wallpaper,
I fell asleep on that twin bed
to the music of a big room
the music of
of her flute,
my sisters piano downstairs.

I never slept
when the parking lot,
outside my window was plowed.
The sheet of white innocence
iced in yellow light.
I never slept
when the heaters creaked, when
the big house stretched her limbs.

I always danced
down the long long
halls,
under that chandelier,
bathed in childhood.
Oblivious to my very own bliss.

I always stared,
at that reservoir
across the road.
I always sat on my dandelion hill
or I sat in my tree,
I let the lilacs
the strawberries,
the daffodils,
the violets
raise me.

In a sunflower house,
in the tall grass,
Ive never known anything else.

I never knew,
the sun falls so differently
burns you differently
when you're somewhere else.

I never knew
there were people somewhere that
didn't know how to get to dandelion hill
and that didn't know how long I spent
in that tree,
in that garden.

They didn't fall asleep to my floral walls
and didn't know that all those details
were so important to me.

And one beautiful day we were gone,
and so were all the people
who did know.

3 comments:

  1. RACHAEL I LOVE THIS SO MUCH. It is so bitter sweet and filled with emotion, I can feel it's delicacy yet harshness and I can feel what it means to you. It's beautiful, just like you!

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  2. I completely agree with Courtney, there is something so eerie almost haunting that make such an impression on the reader. yet at the same time the sweetness of the memories keeps it away from scary or even angry.

    Constructive Criticism- "I never knew,
    the sun falls so differently
    burns you differently
    when you're somewhere else."

    I feel like this part has such potential but something is throwing me off..i dont know if it is the wording or what. BUT amazing job!

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  3. Thank you guys!!!!!!!!!!! I really had no idea where this was going at first, you can probably tell. Lindy I think you are definately right about that stanza, Ill work on it! and thanks so much Courtneyyy!!

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I leave you with these words:

Bravery and fearlessness are two completely different things